when i became somebody else (lyric with no song]

sedikit lirik yang saya buat untuk materi lagu saya. mohon pendapatnya.
liriknya sebagai berikut:

when i was younger
i didn't understand anything
i can't see the one it's true
there has been a downturn

that there is only misery
and there is only loneliness

when i became somebody else
I felt there's something different
and something that sometimes
makes me drowning

when i became somebody else
i felt the aura of sadness
an aura that makes me blind
and keep me looking ahead

I hope always to be myself
who can always be loved
who can always be loved
It's all because of you
It's all because of you
i don't want to be somebody else
anymore


(wrote at dawn, it will be a great song soon, i hope)
Bagi yang expert dimohon komen dan pendapatnya ya